Tue, 23 Jul 2024 14:11:15 EDT
Consider This Sentence
The following sentence occurs in The Washington Post on Apple News. “U.S. Secret Service Director Kimberly Cheatle resigned Tuesday in the aftermath of the assassination attempt on former president Donald Trump in Pennsylvania, telling staff that she took ‘full responsibility,’ according to a copy of a letter sent to agency staff and obtained by The Washington Post.”
The Post loves overly-elaborate run-on summary sentences. The captain does not.
My rewrite: “After intense criticism from U.S. lawmakers, Secret Service Director Kimberly Cheatle resigned from her post on Tuesday. In a letter to staff, Cheatle said that she took ‘full responsibility’ for the security lapse that enabled Saturday’s assassination attempt on former President Donald Trump.”